I am Learning to add Detail to my Writing.

Room 8 has been learning how to add detail into our writing to make it more interesting. We can think about the questions: Who? What? Where? When? How? and Why? to help us add this detail.
We have recently started swimming again and chose this shared experience to write about.

Every Friday it's swimming. All of the Year Twos went swimming. We went in the pool before lunch because we haven't been swimming for a long time now. At first it felt cold but then when I started moving around I got warmer and warmer. Everyone was splashing and going under water. Some people even also had on goggles to see under water. We also had Jump Jam in the pool. Then Mrs Koroa said we can have three minutes free time. I started playing games and trying to swim but I couldn't. Then it was a miracle. I felt brave.

My Reflection

I think that I did a good job with my writing. I think that I did a good job because I added detail. I think that it is tricky to add detail to my writing because you have to think about lots of different things. I think that I will try to use detail in my writing in class time to make my writing more interesting.